Matt L. Posted December 2, 2016 Share Posted December 2, 2016 Looking forward to reading your story. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted December 4, 2016 Share Posted December 4, 2016 I admire the detail you put into the piece, smoothly written as well. An excellent start. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted December 10, 2016 Share Posted December 10, 2016 Enjoying your story, I like how you're setting this up, and the dialogue is crisp and natural. Superb work. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted December 13, 2016 Share Posted December 13, 2016 If I may add to Maverick's point, I've read a few stories and watched a few films where I wondered if the author / screenwriter even had any real contact with females because the dialogue was so out of touch with reality. Speaking in general, I've always listened to the way people talk and incorporate their use of language for the characters in my stories. Your handle of dialogue is very impressive, your story is overall enjoyable. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted December 14, 2016 Share Posted December 14, 2016 As entertaining as your story, the feedback you're generating is likewise enjoyable. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted December 17, 2016 Share Posted December 17, 2016 Smoothly written, the relationship between the girls and their banter have a realistic feel, love the physical descriptions as well as Jessie's figure is improving and Kara's body is softening. Fantastic work! riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted December 23, 2016 Share Posted December 23, 2016 Honest to goodness I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter! riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted December 24, 2016 Share Posted December 24, 2016 Wow! Brilliant work, very enjoyable. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted December 31, 2016 Share Posted December 31, 2016 I re-read your previous installment and it's even more enjoyable the second read. You're hitting all the high marks in the weight gain story genre. Cheers, Matt riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted January 1, 2017 Share Posted January 1, 2017 Enjoyed your latest installment. Neatly orchestrated and a nice set up for further developments. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted January 11, 2017 Share Posted January 11, 2017 Nathanial Hawthorne once wrote, "Easy reading is damned hard writing." Thus this being said, I all the more admire the work you're putting into this gem of a story. Brilliant and then some. Cheers, Matt riptoryx and KarmaMel 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted January 15, 2017 Share Posted January 15, 2017 I like how your story is evolving, the descriptions and dialogue top notch. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted January 17, 2017 Share Posted January 17, 2017 Role reversal is very entertaining, it'll be amusing when Jessie is promoted in social status while Kara has been demoted to wannabe. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted January 29, 2017 Share Posted January 29, 2017 Outstanding story, a new classic in the weight gain genre. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted January 31, 2017 Share Posted January 31, 2017 Looking forward to the epilogue. While the story was quite delicious I'm very curious on what would become of Kara now that she had become the typical fat girl and her friends, especially Jessie. riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted February 1, 2017 Share Posted February 1, 2017 You didn't disappoint, truly entertaining. That being said I must add that your commitment to detail is very commendable and realistic in terms of Kara's overweight figure as well as her facial appearance. I likewise applaud the little things you added into the epilogue, for example her photographs being removed from the wall, suggesting perhaps that even her dad has conceded to Kara being overweight and quite possibly remain heavy. Akin to Maverick's "The Lesson" where Susan realizes at the conclusion she'll never be slim again. Cheers to you for a remarkable story which I'm sure will be read over and over again. Matt riptoryx 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted February 8, 2017 Share Posted February 8, 2017 Maybe it's a guilty pleasure but what really adds to the enjoyment of the conclusion and the amount of weight Kara gained is that people who have never been acquainted with the character when she was slim and energetic and popular will always presumed she has always been a portly woman. Kara would fit into the basic fat girl stereotype of overeating, lazy and undisciplined.. riptoryx and Champ 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Matt L. Posted July 10, 2017 Share Posted July 10, 2017 Your story is such a masterpiece I only wish there would be more or maybe if ever you have the chance write another dark weight gain story. Cheers, Matt Pietro, Champ and riptoryx 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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