dania201 Posted April 7, 2020 Share Posted April 7, 2020 I like the angle on this story. And good execution—dealing with ‘normal’ perceptions of obesity projected on to our muse. Chickenshack and xandercroft 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dania201 Posted April 15, 2020 Share Posted April 15, 2020 16 hours ago, Chickenshack said: Honestly, Im not entirely sure where this story is going anymore. Its just a ton of fun to write the character lol. Hmmm...one idea might be to complete this first date, and then have a part two that fast forwards a year or two—it’s the same date, but he’s enamored. Leave the readers to imagine what happened in between.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dania201 Posted August 3, 2020 Share Posted August 3, 2020 This story is so fun and different. I like how you made the protagonist hard to root for—even though he is like 20 people I know when it would come to these situations. Only thing that lost me is that Katie weighs 1000 pounds?? The way you describe her is 400 or maybe 500 (Sadie-esque).... Chickenshack 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dania201 Posted August 5, 2020 Share Posted August 5, 2020 She’s the size Mayra Rosales was, but not bedbound right? And the Randalyn comparison makes perfect sense. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dania201 Posted August 5, 2020 Share Posted August 5, 2020 3 hours ago, John Smith said: Wait, how??? 1000 pounds. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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