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The New Warden and Catwoman


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21 hours ago, pillow said:

Feel free to let me know what you think. I wasn't sure if I went over stuff to fast or spent to much time on little details. I will try to take the feed back into the next parts, thanks.

Nice work, and solid start. The only things I want to suggest if I could is to sprinkle in more detail to some of the parts, I know it's a matter of preference but I like the process of gaining weight more then stories of gained weight. And adding detail not just to the weight gain, but to to the more mundane parts might be cool to, like learning just what's in that music, and adding any other tricks (like the no mirrors) the warden has in mind to trick and fatten his prisoner.  Whatever you do, I'm sure I'll enjoy reading.

 

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